Hello, today I am going to introduce you to Alena Anis who has not been known much but should be known more due to her beauty, qualities and accomplishments. She was born in Greece in 1990. She graduated from one of the most important universities in Greece. Throughout her university years, she decided to improve herself. She took the tennis course from a very important tennis instructor and she is now playing tennis very well. Then, she did her master's degree on political sciences. However; her dream was different. She wanted to be a model since her childhood, but in these years, Greece had a very hard time. As you know, the crisis including modelling hit all the business fields in Greece. Despite all these, she did not give up her dream and decided to go to Turkey. In the early days of her in Turkey, she despaired to realize her dreams. Then, luckily she has met Acun Ilıcalı and she is now competitor in Survivor in Panama. I believe that one day, she will be a most famous model all over the world thanks to Acun Ilıcalı.
your writing can not be read properly in spite of that your paragraph was well-written:)
YanıtlaSilThank you for your comment. I think the colour of the writing is the reason of this. I will correct it :)
YanıtlaSilDear Gizem I liked your writing.your article is well organized . I Think you should be more careful in grammar terms such as punctuation , modifier,and preposition. I think ın your first sentence you should use ' comma ' before Alena Anis instead of 'to' and comma before Alena Anis as it is non defining relative clause and you also should be careful using 'more' and 'much' modifiers . you can use 'famous tennis instructor' in stead of 'important tennis instructor '. Above all I appreciate your writing .
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